大学入学申请书范本【篇一：申请美国大学入学文书范本】申请美国大学入学文书范本iguessitwasinevitablethati’dbeonhockeyskatesatsomepointinmylife,butididnotexpectthati’dbecomeoneofararegroupoffemaleicehockeyofficialsbeforeievenreachedhighschool.beingbornintoafamilyofhockeyplayersandfigureskaters,itseemedthatmydestinyhadalreadybeendecided.rightfromthebeginning,mytwoolderbrothersandmyfatherstrappedmeupandthrewmeontotheice.iloveditand,inmymind,iwasonmywaytobecomingafemalegretzky!butmymomhadtothinkofsomethingfasttodragherlittlegirlawayfromthissportofruffians.entermyfirsthotpinkfigureskatingdress!thatwasallittooktolaunchfifteenyearsofcompetitivefigureskating.eventhoughfigureskatingsoonbecamemypassion,ialwayshadanunsatisfiedyearningforicehockey.ittookagreatdealofconvincingfrommyparentsthatcompetitivefigureskatingandicehockeydidn’tmix.mycompromisebecamerefereeingicehockey;littledidiknowthatiwasbeginninganactivitythatwouldinfluencemycharacterandwhoiamtoday.whenibegan,iwouldonlyworkwithmydadandbrothers.everyonewasfriendlyandacceptingbecauseihadjuststarted.isoonrealizedthoughthattogetbetterineededtostartrefereeingwithpeopleiwasn’trelatedto,andthat’swhenmyexperiencedrasticallychanged.anapologeticsmileandan“i’msorry”wasn’tgoingtoimadethedecisiontostandupformyself.ineverrespondedrudelytothecoaches,butididnotletthemwalkallovermeanddestroymyconfidenceanymore.istartedtoactandfeelmorelikethe4-yearcertifiedatlanticdistrictofficialthatiam.therewerestillafewsituationsthatscaredme.onetimeicalledapenaltyinachampionshipgameduringthethirdovertimeandtheteamipenalizedendeduplosingbecausetheygotscoredon.iknewihadmadetherightcall,eventhoughiwasunnervedwhenisawthelosingteams’parentswaitingformeatmylockerroom;forthemomentiwishedihadn’tcalledthatpenalty.althoughitwasscaryatthetime,istoodmygroundandovercamemyfears.thatwasanimportantstepping-stoneinmyofficiatingcareerandinmylife.afterfouryearsofrefereeing,istillcan’tsayit’seasy.everygamehandsmesomethingnewandineverknowwhattoexpect.nowihavetheconfidenceandpreparationtodealwiththeunexpected,onandofftheice.inowalsoknowtotakeeverythingwithagrainofsaltandnotletitgettome.ihavelearnedthatlifeisjustlikebeingoutontheice;ifiampreparedandactwithconfidence,iwillbeperceivedasconfident.thesearethelittlelessonsthati’mgratefultohavelearnedasawomanreferee.thingstonoticeaboutthisessay1.theauthortellsaninterestingstoryaboutherexperiencesasareferee.2.asenseofherpersonality—determination,flexibility,goodhumor—comesthroughinthenarration.3.detailslike“doyouhaveahotdatetonight,ref?”makethenarrationmemorable(we’dlovetohearmoreofthesekindsofdetails).4.theessayneedsafasterstart.thefirstparagraph(threesentences)saysthesamethinginboththefirstandthirdsentences—andgivesawaytheessay’ssurpriseinthesecond!agoodrevisionwoulddeleteallofparagraphoneandstartatparagraphtwo.5.there’stoomuchframehereandnotenoughpicture.theessayneedsfurtherdevelopment,especiallyaboutthedifficultiesofbecomingandbeingaref,tokeepitvivid.6.theauthorshould“dwell”inthemeaningoftheexperiencealittlemoreattheend—“iwonderabout…ialsothink…sometimesibelieve….”significantexperienceslikethisone,woventhroughmanyyearsoftheauthor’slife,don’tmeanjustonething—therearemoreinsightsandlessonstoexplorehere.【篇二：申请国外大学的范文和指导】除了通用申请的essay之外，有些学校还提供另外写一篇essay的机会。有些...
