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联考作文题：1.一次令你快乐的成长经历；2.你的体会和感想。审题：要点，格式，人称，时态要求：描写具体，语言生动，过程真实，语法正确。构思：快乐与成长的经历BeginningBodyEnding开头直接点题1.It’sagreatpleasureformetobeheretodayandI’llsharemygrowingexperienceherewithyou.2.Goodmorning,everyone!TodayIwanttoshareahappyexperienceinmylifewithyou..开头直接点题,语言优美4.Goodmorning,everyone!Iamveryhonoredtostandhereandshareoneofmygrowingexperiences.Tracingmygrowth,IthinknothingcouldbemoremeaningfulandenjoyablethanvolunteeringfortheUniversityStudentsSportsMeetingin2011.5.Throughoutthelifejourney,therearecountlessexperiencesaccompanyingus,eitherbrightorgrey.Theyseemtobeeye-catchingpealswhichdecoratedourgrowingsoul.StillIremembertheexperiencewhichmademehappy.Fromthenon,IfeelthatIammorematureandalwayshaveasenseofobligation.Contributionmakesmygrowthhappyandunregretful.Ireallyappreciatethisexperience.主体部分：过程真实，描写具体，过程真实，语法正确。1.Onebeautifulsunnyday,I,togetherwithsomeofmyclassmates,wenttovisitthenursinghouse(敬老院)locatednotfarawayfromourschool.Wehelpedtheoldmencleanthehouseandchattedwiththem.Someclassmateswhoaregoodatsinginganddancingalsopreparedaperformancetoshowourloveandcaretothem.Seeingthebrightsmileontheirface,wefelthappyforwhatwedid,thoughwewerealittleexhausted.（benifit）主体部分：过程真实，描写具体语法正确，语言生动3.IthappenedwhenIwas12.Atthattime,Iwastooshytospeakonewordloudinclass.Oneday,myteacheraskedstudentstosharetheirtravelexperiences.TravelismyfavoriteactivityandIhadlotsofthingstosay.Afterstrugglinginmymind,Iputupmyhandforthefirsttime.Tomysurprise,allmyclassmateswereattractedbymywords.Thoughmyfacestillturnedred,IwashappywithwhatIhaveachieved.主体部分：过程真实，描写具体语法正确，语言生动4.Asa15-year-oldstudent,Iwastheyoungestamongallthevolunteers.ButIdidn’trelaxmyself.Instead,Iworkedharder.Isentumbrellastopassers-bywhenitrained.Ipassedsomepillstotravelerswhowerenotfeelingwell.Inreturn,theysmiledtomegratefully.Tiredbuthappy,Iobtainedvaluablefriendshipandcommunicationskillswithstrangers,whichmakemegrowmature.结尾部分：总结全文，升华主题1.Itwasmyfirstvolunteerexperience,whichencouragesmetodevotemyselftomoresocialactivities.Fromthenon,IfeelthatIammorematureandalwayshaveasenseofobligation.Contributionmakesmygrowthhappyandunregretful.Ireallyappreciatethisexperience.2.Iameighteenyearsoldnow,whichmeansI’vebecomeanadultandhavemoreresponsibilitytobear.I’lldomybesttoreturnmyparents’loveandliveuptotheirexpectations.Goodmorning,everyone!TodayIwanttoshareahappyexperienceinmylifewithyou.Throughoutthelifejourney,therearecountlessexperiencesaccompanyingus,eitherbrightorgrey.Theyseemtobeeye-catchingpealswhichdecoratedourgrowingsoul.StillIremembertheexperiencewhichmademehappy.1.Onebeautifulsunnyday,I,togetherwithsomeofmyclassmates,wenttovisitthenursinghouse(敬老院)locatednotfarawayfromourschool.Wehelpedtheoldpeoplecleanthehouseandchattedwiththem.Someclassmateswhoaregoodatsinginganddancingalsopreparedaperformancetoshowourloveandcaretothem.Seeingthebrightsmileontheirface,wefelthappyforwhatwedid,thoughwewerealittleexhausted.结尾部分：总结全文，升华主题3.Ihavelearntfromtheexperiencethemeaningofhappiness.Whatblessesmemostisbeingabletohelpmyfriends.Theexperiencemakesmemoremature.(385马聪)4.Forme,theexperienceinGuilingdoeseducateme.WheneverImeettrouble,Itellmyself,justhaveatryandyoucandoit!(385姚彤)5.Afterthat,Ibecamemoreconfidentandactiveinclass.Speakingoutyouropinionandchangeviewswithpeoplearoundyouwillhaveathoroughunderstandingofthings.(384胡奕奕)6.Fromthatexperience,Ihavegainedconfidenceinmyself.Asasayinggoes“Theonlyoneyouneedtobeatisyourself.”Thereisnothingtoodifficultforustoaccomplish.Stepforwardwithconfidenceandwe’llgrowuphappilyandsuccessfully.(384张宇凡)