外教点评学生英语作文后的思考衢州二中①SusanKrantz与《外籍教师点评英语作文》一书②《高中英语课程标准》解读一、背景介绍二、思考之一语言表达方式受传统习惯的影响/英语文化中的人士的表达方式1、中国英语教师教作文的方式与errorgravity中国人往往注意理性分析、逻辑思维,往往注重结果,总要得出结论。西方人写作则较多利用实证分析、实例分析方法。他们注重对过程和事实的描述,往往不得出结果,让读者自己分析、并得出结论。“Englishwritingismoredirect.Thingsareclearlyexplained.Detailsorfactsarerequiredtosupportthetopic.”（SusanKrantz2001）我们来看一看美国明尼苏达州雷德温市市长重访浙江衢州后，对衢州所发生的变化所发出的感言。（摘录）“OneFootintheFutureandOneFootinthePast”.ThisismyforemostimpressionasIvisitQuzhou.Onecannotmisstheoldandthenewexistingsidebyside.Asaforeigneritisdifficulttosaywhichisthe‘RealChina’.Isitthelargenumberofpeopleridingtheiroldbicyclesloadeddownwithgoodsorisittheblackshinyluxurycarbeingdrivendownthestreet?IsittheschoolinruralareaswiththeleakingrooforisitthemodernschoolsbeingbuiltinQuzhou?Isitthefourlaneexpresswayorisitthesinglelanewalkingpathtoaremotevillage?EverywhereIlookIseetheoldandthenewexistingsidebyside.“OneFootintheFutureandOneFootinthePast”.…Iamespeciallyfamiliarwithfarmsandfarmcooperatives.MystayinQuzhouhasprovidedmewiththeopportunitytoparticipateinmeetingsaboutagriculture.WhenIattendthemeetingsitseemsasifIhavebeentherebefore.Iamthinking-amIwatchingarerunof“AnOldMovie”?ThistypeofmeetingshastakenplaceinAmericancommunitiesandfarmsanumberofyearsago.Ihavewalkedalongtheriverbankwithafreshbreezeblowingthatpickedmyspiritsupandmademeforgetmyhomesickness.IhavegazedacrosstherivertothenewwesternsectionofQuzhouwhereallthenewgrowthofthetownisexpectedtogo.下面几段话是摘自美国明尼苏达州雷德温市希尔顿剧院经理、导演希恩-多尔兹先生在衢州二中任教时所写的感言。DuringmysecondweekatQuzhouNo.2MiddleSchool,Ihavethehighhonorofworkingwithagroupofdedicated,hardworking,andverysmartteachersandadministratorswhohavemademefeelverywelcomeandinstantlyapartoftheirteam.Eachdaycontinuestobeawonderfulnewadventureinfood,people,andplaces.Itisincrediblyancientyetyoung,brash,andfullofenergy.Theownerwaslounginginachairdozing.Myfriendgothisattention.Hesaid:"Itprobablywon'tsoundtoogood,Iamalittledrunk."Themusicianbrokeawayfromherbusydaytotapepickstoherfingers,laboriouslytunethe21-stringedinstrument.Music,though,isuniversal,andbeingabstract,canbesharedequallyandwithouttranslation.ThisculturalbaseofChina,thisstrainofmusicthatvibratesthroughthesoulofapeople,andthiswayofmakingandsharingmusic,willserve,inthisoutsider'smostlyignorantopinion,aspartofthesolidgrounduponwhichChinacanbuildadynamicandpowerfulfuture.中国学生的句子1．原句：Ithinkifyouknowthetwosidesofthenetting,youwillhaveagoodwayofusingthecomputer.修改后句子：TheInternethastwosides,youwilljusthavetofindagoodwayofusingit.2．原句：WhenIhavefreetime,I’llenjoythemverymuch.修改后句子：IthinkwhenIhavefreetimeIwillplaywiththemalot.3．原句：Fishing,collectingstamps,Ijustlikethem.修改后句子：Fishing,collectingstamps,Ilikethemall.4．原句：Ontheothersidetheremaybeafamousemblematicbuildingofthecountry,andalsohavethevalueofthecoinandthedate.修改后句子：Ontheothersidetheremaybeafamousemblematicbuildingofthecountry,thedateandthevalueofthecoin.5．原句：Inthebasketballcourttwostrongteamswereplayingabittermatch.Oneoftheteamsisours,theotherisclass4’steam.修改后句子...
