TheDayWhenEverythingWentWrongPeriod1Inthislessonyouwillbeableto1.Learntopolishbycomparingtwowritings2.Writeastory;3.UselinkingwordsLead-in•Doyoulovestories?•Whatfactorsshouldbeincludedinastory?StoryWhoWhenWhereWhatLead-in•WhatwillyouwriteaboutwhenyouseethetitleADayWhenEverythingWentWrong?Sample:tellwhathappenedinthepicturesLastMonday,myalarmclockdidn'tring,soIgotuponehourlate.WhenIhurriedlyrantothebusstop,thebushadleft.Asaresult,Iwaslateforschool.•Writethreeorfoursentencesononebadeventthatyouhaveexperienced,includingwho,when,whereandwhat.•ReadDraftAofastudent’scompositiononthetopicADayWhenEverythingWentWrong.Question:Howmanyeventsarementionedinthestory?EventsinDraftA1.IWalkedtoschool;2.Icamelastinthepoetryreadingcompetition;3.Ispilledwateronmypillow•WritetwoorthreeeventsonthetopicADayWhenEverythingWentWrong.•Youcanwriteabouteverybadthingyouhaveexperienced,suchaslosingsomethingimportant,hurtingyourleg,beinglateforschool,failinganexam…•Shareyourwritingwithyourpartner.Whatotherfactorsshouldbeincludedinastory?StoryWhoWhenWhereWhatWhyHowHowtoendHowyoufeel•Why:•Feelings:Noschoolbus;notpreparedthecompetitionTiresome;awkwardReadDraftAandfindtheotherfactorsofthestory•Putwhyandfeelingsinyourwritings.•Shareyourwritingwithyourpartner.•ReadDraftBandtellwhichoneisbetter.WhatdoesthewriteraddinDraftB?•InDraftB,thewriteruseslinkingwordsandaddssomedetailsandspecificinformationtoattracttheattentionofthereader.Besides,theorderofeventsisclearerandthelanguageismorevivid.Orderofevents:A:1.Becausetheschoolbusdidnot…2.Atschool,Mr.fan…3.WhenIgotintobedthatnight,I…B:1.First,Ihadtowait30minutesfortheschoolbus…2.ThenextproblemhappenedwhenIarrivedatschool.3.ThelastproblemofthisterribledayhappenedwhenIgotinto…First,next,lastWhen…Vividlanguage:A:1.Itwashotandtiresome.2.Mr.fan,theEnglishteacherremindedmeofthe…Thissurprisedme…3.Icamelastinthecompetition.B:1.Thedaywashotandtiring.2.Mr.Fan,theEnglishteacher,alargebutfriendlyman,gavemeanastysurprise.Heremindedmeinhisloudvoicethat…3.IwasnotsurprisedwhenIcamelastinthecompetition.Adjectivesareused.•Uselinkingwordsandadjectivesinyourwriting,referringtoinformationonpage97.Linkingwords1.并列2.转折3.因果4.其他and,both…andbut,however,so,becausewhen,suddenly,assoonas,unfortunately,so…that…,first,intheend,asaresult1.体裁：2.时态：3.人称：4.主题：记叙文体一般过去时第一人称描述过去个人经历•WriteyourstoryADayWhenEverythingWentWrong,usingcolourfullanguage.(referringtoWritingHelp1onP97)•1、几天前•theotherday;severaldaysago•2、使人感到意外•toone’ssurprise•3、就在这时•atthatmoment;atthattime•4、两小时后•twohourslater常用表达法aspectsYourevaluation评价人contentsExcellentGoodAcceptableorderofeventsExcellentGoodAcceptablelanguageExcellentGoodAcceptablelinkingExcellentGoodAcceptableEvaluation(评价）√√√√
