2013高考英语二轮书面表达（四月）训练集（3）及参考范文假设你是李华,你在报上看到北京电视台今年七月将举办外国人"学中文,唱中文歌"才艺大赛。你的美国朋友Peter正在北京一所大学学中文,你觉得他应去试一试。请按以下要点给他写信告知此事,并表示可以提供帮助。比赛时间:7月18日报名时间:截止到6月30日报名地点:北京电视台注意:1.词数:100左右2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯3.参考词汇:才艺大赛-talentshowDearPeter,_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,LiHuaGuidedwriting:DearPeter,Ireadinanewspapertodaythata"LearnChinese,SingChineseSongs"TalentShowwillbeheldinBeijingTelevisionStationonJuly18.ItisintendedforforeignerswhoaregoodatChinese.Iknowyoulikesinging,andyouareinBeijingduringthatperiod.NowthatyouhavestudiedChineseforseveralyearsatauniversityinBeijing,Ithinkthisisagoodchanceforyoutoshowyoursingingtalent,andhowwellyou'velearnedChinese.Ifyouwouldliketotry,you'llhavetogototheTVstationtosignupbeforetheendofJune.IfthereisanythingIcandoforyou,Iwouldbemorethangladtohelp.Yours,LiHu【写作要求】根据提示的情景，用英文写一篇80-100词的短文。不必根据中文逐字逐句翻译。1我们的学校历史悠久。毕业学生中不少已成为各自领域中的专家。近年来，我们的学校发生了很大的变化。我们为自己的学校感到自豪。【学生实作】Ourschoolhasalonghistory.Itistoldthatitdatedfromonehundredyearsago.Fromitwasfoundedon,thereweremoreandmorestudentsinit.Andtheformerstudentsalldidwellintheirstudying.Someofthemareoutstanding.Becauseoftheirgoodstudiesandhardwork,manyoftheschoolleavershavebecomeexpertsindifferentfields.Theseyearsourschoolhaschangedgreat,itbecomesmoreandmorebeautiful.Besides,theteachers'teachingmethodsaremoreadvancedthanbefore.Atthesametime,thestudentsstudyveryhard,andwearedeterminedtomakegreatcontributiontoourschool.Welikeourschoolverymuch!Weareproudofit!【评析】1．第2句：istold应为issaid。（以下错误均在第一段）2．第2句：dated应改为dates。3．第3句：from...on不能表示从过去的某个时间一直到现在的情况，因此这里用since较好。另外，from...on中间应是名词，而不能是从句。4．第3句：主句中应用现在完成时态，表示从过去一直到现在的情况。把therewere改为therehavebeen。5．第4句：studying最好改为studies，指"学业"。6．第5句：本句应是说以前的学生的情况，are应改为were。7．第7句：great应改为greatly。修饰动词应用副词形式。28．第7句：ourschoolhaschangedgreatly是一个完整的句子，其后也是一个完整的句子，而两个完整的句子没有连词时是不能并列的。最好中间用句号，使各自独立成句。9．第9句：study改为arestudying更为生动。10．第9句：veryhard最好改为evenharder，以对应前面的比较级。【总评】优点：1．基本写出了题目要求的几方面的内容。2．这是一篇半开放的写作。习作者适当地增补细节对内容进行了展开，使内容较为全面、丰富。3．语句表达较为连贯。不足：1．有一处句与句之间没有连词连接的情况，这是不符合英语习惯的。2．谓语动词的时态有几处运用不当。【修改之后】Ourschoolhasalonghistory.Itissaidthatitdatesfromonehundredyearsago.Sinceitwasfounded,therehavebeenmoreandmorestudentsinit.Andtheformerstudentsalldidwellintheirstudies.Someofthemwereoutstanding.Becauseoftheirgoodstudiesandhardwork,manyoftheschoolleavershavebecomeexpertsindifferentfields.Theseyearsourschoolhaschangedgreatly.Itbecomesmoreandmorebeautiful.Besides,theteachers'teachingmethodsaremoreadvancedthanbefore.Atthesametime,thestudentsarestudyingevenharder,andwearedeterminedtomakegr...
