段落的展开---如何做到论述的具体和充分以2011年6月四级作文onlineshopping为例范文一•Nowadayswiththeeverrapiddevelopmentandincreasingpopularityoftheinformationtechnology,shoppingontheinternethasbeenafashionespeciallyamongtheyoungsters.•Onlineshoppinghasmadeourdailylifemoreconvenientandcomfortable.Forexample,shoppingontheinternetcansavestudentsagreatdealoftimeonthewaybetweenhomeandstore,sotheywouldbeabletoconcentratemoretimeandenergyontheiracademicwork.Theinternethasshortenthedistancebetweenmanufacturersandconsumersandthuswecanevenbuygoodsinothercountries.Ontheotherhand,lackofthefacetofacedealmakesonlineshoppinglessreliableandtrustworthy.What’smore，thedeliverywillincreasetheriskofitems’damage.•Inmyopinion,shoppingontheinternetisairreversibletrend.Moreandmorepeoplewillbeaccustomedtoit.Itwillbemuchmorepopularinthenearfuture.Andatthesametimeweshouldtakesomemeasurestomakeitperfect.具体而充分地展开段落---第1段•Nowadayswiththeeverrapiddevelopmentandincreasingpopularityoftheinformationtechnology,shoppingontheinternethasbeenafashionespeciallyamongtheyoungsters.•在现象陈述中，捎带原因分析（informationtechnology)因果分析法•提及了网购的主要人群，即青少年。举例法•从general到specific具体而充分地展开段落---第2段•Onlineshoppinghasmadeourdailylifemoreconvenientandcomfortable.Forexample,shoppingontheinternetcansavestudentsagreatdealoftimeonthewaybetweenhomeandstore,sotheywouldbeabletoconcentratemoretimeandenergyontheiracademicwork.Theinternethasshortenthedistancebetweenmanufacturersandconsumersandthuswecanevenbuygoodsinothercountries.Ontheotherhand,lackofthefacetofacedealmakesonlineshoppinglessreliableandtrustworthy.What’smore，thedeliverywillincreasetheriskofitems’damage.•主题句之后，用举例法（学生网购节省时间专注于课业）来充分论述；•自然过渡到第二种具体的网购便利：跨国网购•话题转向网购的不利之处，仍然有二。两者都很简练，但不失具体（没有当面交易的保障，投送过程中的货物损坏）•另，几个关联词使上下文无论是递进、转折，还是举例都过渡自然，衔接得当•从general到specific具体而充分地展开段落---第3段•Inmyopinion,shoppingontheinternetisairreversibletrend.Moreandmorepeoplewillbeaccustomedtoit.Itwillbemuchmorepopularinthenearfuture.Andatthesametimeweshouldtakesomemeasurestomakeitperfect.•结尾：个人观点的陈述是温和中立型------肯定其存在的合理性，同时提出需要改进的地方。•作为结尾，概括性强一点会有一定的高度。–不可抵挡的趋势，会更加广为接受–采取措施使其更加完善其缺点。（不需要就具体的措施展开论述，因为这已经不是文章的主体部分）•需要补充的是，虽然结尾处概括性较强，但内容仍然饱和，不是干巴巴地总结复述前文，也不是空洞地喊口号。范文二•Today,withtherapiddevelopmentinelectroniccommerce,businessareattemptingtogaingreatpopularitybyusingonlineshoppingtointeractwithcustomers.AccordingtoJackMa,founderandCEOofAlibabaGroup,Alibaba.comservesmorethan70millionmembersfrommorethan250countriesandterritories.•Infact,bothonlineshoppingandtraditionalshoppinghavesomeadvantagesanddisadvantages.Tobeginwith,onlineshoppingisveryconvenientforshoppingandallowsforavastselectionofgoodstobeatyourfingertips.Youdon'thavetoworryaboutthecrowdsinthemall,findingforaparkingspot,andstuckinatrafficjam.Besides,withtheonlinetoolsthatenablegoodscomparison,youcancomparepricesandqualitiestomakeabetterdecisionwithlesseffort.However,thoughonlineshoppingis24/7available,arecentstudyhasfoundthatprivacywasstillthetopconcernofpeoplew...
