词汇,句型（高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）1.覆盖了所有的要点2.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇3.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑4.语言得体要点全连接词如何算是一篇好文章？如何算是一篇好文章？语言地道，规范acompositiontopicsentence（主题句）supportingsentences（扩展句）ending（结尾句）过渡词：first,second,finally,and,besides,also,but,however,what’smore…Writingacompositionisjustlikemakingasandwich.一改变句子的开头方式，不要一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首.Theboyisveryhungryandhehurriedhome.Hungry,theboyhurriedhome.Theboy,hungry,hurriedhome.二.Transformationofsentencesinwriting(写作中的句型转换)A.合并为简单句1.把其中一句改为分词短语Hehadfinishedsupper.Hewentouttohaveawalkthen.Havingfinishedsupper,hewentouttohaveawalk.二.Transformationofsentencesinwriting(写作中的句型转换)2.把其中一句改为介词短语Hewasbroughtin.Hishandsweretiedbehindhisback.Hewasbroughtinwithhishandstiedbehindhisback.B.合并为复合句1.TheChineseartistsweretoperformherethatnight.Thenewscheeredeveryoneofus.ThenewsthattheChineseartistsweretoperformherethatnightcheeredeveryoneofus.2Inrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast.Allthesemakepeople’slivesconvenient,pleasantandcolorful.whichInrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast,makespeople’slivesconvenient,pleasant…C.把复合句改为简单句1.把从句改为分词短语Shewasanxioustofindajobaftershefinishedherstudies.Havingfinishedherstudies,shewasanxioustofindajob.2.把从句改为介词短语Iinsistedthatheshouldgo.Iinsistedonhimgoing.三.在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用以下结构：倒装句强调句主从复合句分词状语With复合结构Thoughheiswealthy,heworkshard.Wealthyasheis,heworkshard.Inspiteof/Despitehiswealth,heworkshard.Hedidn’tgetupuntil7o’clock.Itwasnotuntil7o’clockthathegotup.Notuntil7o’clockdidhegetup.Ihadagoodidea.Agoodideaoccurredto/struck/cametome.Icameupwithagoodidea.注意使用词组、习语谚语、表强调的词来代替一些单词，以增加文采。四.use“complicated/advancedwords”A.Second,twentyyearsago,teenagerslistenedtomusicwithtaperecorders.Differently,todayweusemp3,mp4andevenmp5whichareeasytotake.B.Anotherchangeisincommunication.Insteadofwritingletters,teenagersnowadayspreferwritinge-mailsorcallingtokeepintouchwithfriends.C.First,teenagersoftwentyyearsagolearnfromLeiFengandZhangHaidi,whilenowweconsiderBillGatesand…asourrolemodels.D.Whatgreatchangestheyare!E.Greatchangeshavetakenplaceinteenagers’lifeduringthepasttwentyyears.CorrectOrder:___________________________ECABD一，改变句子的开头方式二，句型转换A.合并为简单句把其中一句改为分词短语把其中一句改为介词短语B.合并为复合句C.把复合句改为简单句把从句改为分词短语把从句改为介词短语三，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语、with复合结构等.四，注意使用高级词汇代替一些单词，以增加文采。五.有效使用连接词，过渡自然，连贯通顺，使文章结构紧凑。1汉式英语2句式单一平铺直叙3基础词汇掌握不牢4书写不规范CommonmistakesCommonmistakesmakesentences3determinewhattowrite1copy6check5Writingsteps:Writingsteps:4edit2thinkoutthethinkoutthekeywords1.格式2.人称3.时态4.要点5.语法6.字数7.书写书面表达（满分30分）你校学生会准备办一期英语墙报，主题为：保护环境从我做起。请你根据下图所示写一篇英语短文。注意：1.词数100左右，开头语已为你写好；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。WhatcanIdoforourenvironment?Everyonecandosomethingforourenvironment.saveelectricityturnoffthelightsprotectourforestsusepaperwiselynotusethingslikepapercupsordisposablechopsticksusebothsidesofpaperDoyouincludeenoughinformation?includeenoughinformation?useproperlinkingwords?useproperlinkingwords?makeanyspellingorgrammarmakeanyspellingorgrammarerrors?errors?Isyourhandwritingclearenoughtoread?Isyourhandwritingclearenoughtoread?WhatcanIdoforourenvironment?Everyonecandosomethingforourenvironment.Tolovetheenvironmentistoloveourselves.Astome,IwilltrytosaveelectricityinmydailylifebyrememberingtoturnoffthelightswhenIamthelastpersontoleavetheclassroomintheevening.Inordertoprotectourforests,Iwillusepaperwisely.Itisbothsidesofpaperthatshouldbeusedwheneveritispossible.What’smore,neverwillIusethingslikepapercupsordisposablechopsticksbecausetheyaremadeofwood.Inaword,withdoingallthesesmallthings,wewillnotonlyimproveourenvironmentbutalsohelpmakeourworldabetterplacetolivein.Romeisnotbuiltinoneday.Practicemakesperfect!
