【创新设计】版高考英语Unit2Englisharoundtheworld外教点评作文总复习新人教版必修1我打算下星期去看望我中学时的英语老师。她已执教三十年,具有丰富的教学经验。她的教学方法给我留下了深刻的印象。在她的帮助下,我的英语曾有很大的进步。学生习作·外教批改Iwill1plantovisitmyEnglishteachernextweek.Shehasbeenateacherfor30years.Withherhelp,myEnglishimprovedfastly2rapidly.Shegavememadeagoodimpressiononme.3IstudiedinNo2MiddleSchool.MyEnglishteacheriswas4aqualifiedteacher.ShealwayshelpedusinwithourEnglish.Sheiswasfriendly.Atherclass,theclassisHerclasswasfulloflaughing5laughtersogavemeagoodimpression.6I’llneverforgetmyEnglishteacher.I’mIwaspoorinEnglish,andMymyEnglishteacheroftentelltoldme“Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.”SoIthinkifIworkhardandtrymybesttolearnEnglish,I’llstudywell.SoIthoughtthatifIworkedhardandtriedmybesttolearnEnglish,Iwouldsucceed.Uptonow,manyyearspast.7Manyyearshavepassedsincethen.IalwaysstillremembermyEnglishteacher.Iwanttothankherandgivemecouragefor8givingmeencouragement9.旁批1.plan这个词已经有将来的含义,所以不必再用will。2.没有fastly这个词。可以用rapidly或quickly代替。3.这才是正确的表达。4.虽然可能这位女士现在还是一位好老师,但你仍然要用过去时态,因为你在讲述你念中学时候的事情。5.正确的词组是:fulloflaughter。6.你已经说过这句话,没必要再重复。7.你应该用现在完成时态,因为你正在谈论过去的一件事情对现在的影响。8.正确的结构是:thanksomeonefordoingsomething。9.在这个语境中encouragement比courage好。同时,它的意思也不一样。要确保你所选的词能准确地表达你的意思。这是一篇较差的作文。文中的时态用得很不好。故事明显发生在过去,但是作者用了一般现在时。即便如此,句子结构也不正确。作者的词性知识也不足(如:laughing/laughter,courage/encouragement)。高三水平应该对词性很熟悉并知道如何将它们用在恰当的语境中。值得肯定的是,文章的内容表明作者对题目要求还是明确的,并较好地回答了题目所要求的内容。高分作文秘诀之一:使用正确的时态。例如:Insteadof(不要说:)Abigfiredestroytheforestwhichbelongtothevillagers.Use(要说:)Abigfiredestroyedtheforestwhichbelongedtothevillagers.Insteadof(不要说:)Thevillagechangedgreatlysincehelefthishometown.Use(要说:)Thevillagehaschangedgreatlysincehelefthishometown.Insteadof(不要说:)Nancyhadpromisedtocometonight.Use(要说:)Nancypromisedtocometonight.Insteadof(不要说:)SoIwritetoapplyforthejob.Use(要说:)SoIamwritingtoapplyforthejob.姓名刘翔性别男籍贯上海生日1983年7月13日身高1.88m体重74公斤项目田径(110米栏)基本情况年8月入选国家青年田径队年获亚运会及亚锦标赛冠军年在英国世界室内田径锦标赛中获60米跨栏第三年8月27日获雅典奥运会冠军,成绩是12秒91,追平世界纪录,打破奥运会记录参考范文:LiuXiang,withaheightof188cmandaweightof74kg,wasbornonJuly13,1983inShanghai.InAugust,,hewasadmittedtotheNationalTrackandFieldYouthTeam.In,hewonthegoldmedalsinthemen’s110mhurdlesattheAsianGamesandAsianChampionship.Thenextyearhetookthirdinthe60mhurdlesattheWorldIndoorChampionshipsinEngland.OnAugust27,,Liuwonthemen’s110mhurdlesfinalin12.91secondsattheAthensOlympicGames,equalingtheworldrecordsetandbreakingtheOlympicrecord.