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第1页共8页读后续写写作指导【任务呈现】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。TheSea’sSurpriseJimandAndywalkedalongthebeach,lookingforanadventure.Theyjokedthatsomedaytheywouldfindatalkingfishoramermaidorabottlewithatreasuremapinside.Sofartheyhadonlyfoundshellsandrocksandseaweed.Todaythoughwasdifferent.Theboysfeltexcited.Seacrabsscamperedontherocks.Uponesideanddowntheother.Theywerequickandlively.Thetidedidn’tseemtoeverwashthemaway.ThenJimsawafish.Itwasstrandedonthebeach,justfloppingaround.“Canittalk?”Andyasked.“Itlookslikeanyotherfish,”Jimsaid.Hepickeditupgentlyandcarriedittothewater.“Doyouthinkitwillgrantusanywishes?”Andylaughed.Theboyswatchedasthesilverfishspedoffthroughthewater.“No.Maybenexttime.”Jimgrinned.Asthetwofriendswalkedfartherdownthebeachtheycameuponabottle.Itwasgreenwithacorkinthemouth.“Ourluckwillchange.Doesithaveamapinsideoragenie?”jokedAndy.Andyreacheddownandpickedupthebottle.Herubbedit.Nothinghappened.Hepulledonthecork.Nothinghappened.Heshookit.Nothinghappened.“Trythecorkagain.Ibetthegenieiswaitingforustoreleasehim.Orwe’llfindatreasuremapandhavearealadventure,”Jimexclaimed.Andytuggedagainonthecork.Hewiggleditbackandforth.Hetwisteditaroundandaround.Finallyitpoppedoutwithoutbreaking.Andyshookthebottle.Nothingcameout.Lookinginsidehecouldn’tseeanything.Jimlookedtooandshookhishead.Empty.“It’sjustanoldwinebottle,”Jimcomplained.Hegrabbedthebottleandtosseditbackontothesand.注意：第2页共8页1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thebottlehitarockandshatteredintomanypieces._______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Twoboysranafterit._______________________________________________________________________________【写作思路与分析】一、文本分析1.归纳基本信息2.理清故事情节Jim和Andy想在海边寻宝→挽救了一条搁浅的鱼→碰到了一个瓶子→？？？Beginning:JimandAndywalkedalongthebeach,lookingfortreasure.→Jimsawastrandedfishonthebeach.→Jimpickedthefishgentlyandcarrieditintothewater.→Theywalkedfartherdownthebeachandcameuponabottle.→Andyreacheddownandpickedupthebottle.→Herubbedthebottle,pulledonthecorkandshookthebottle.Nothinghappened.→Jimgrabbedthe第3页共8页bottleandtosseditbackontothesand.→Thebottlehitarockandshatteredintomanypieces.→Climax:?→Twoboysranafterit.→Ending:?二、寻找情节线索1.梳理续写逻辑：细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落间的逻辑关系Paragraph1:Thebottlehitarockandshatteredintomanypieces.Whatwasinthebrokenbottle?WhatdidJimandAndydo?Whathappenedtothebrokenbottle?Paragraph2:Twoboysranafterit.Whydidtheboysrunafterit?Whatdidtheyfindlater?WherewasthestrandedfishsavedbyJim?2.归纳总结关键词：围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节feltexcited,stranded—感受与状态silver—颜色treasure,bottle—重要事物pickedup,waitingfor,shookthebottle,complained—动作backandforth—方式将关键词归类后，可以判断事物中的bottle在续写时必须使用，其他词可选择性使用。三、预测情节发展Paragraph1：根据画线词pickedup,silver,bottle可构思本段细节：瓶子碎了，Andy和Jim看见一把银(silver)钥匙掉在地上，Andy弯腰想拾起(pickup)钥匙。突然瓶子(bottle)又完好如初，钥匙又回到里面了。Paragraph2：根据画线词feltexcited,treasure和stranded可构思本段细节：两个孩子跟着瓶子跑。他们进入海里时没有下沉而是...