让作文灵动的办法•一、使用适当的连词和连词短语及过渡语•二、改变传统语序•三、使用不同的从句和句型•四、使用非谓语动词•五、运用开放思维加定语AnUnforgettableExperience1
今年暑假,我和家人去了大连2
早餐后,我们乘巴士去了海洋公园
那里有很多鱼,还有海豚表演,午餐在饭店吃了海鲜3
午餐后去游泳,海水蓝,沙滩金黄,我们玩得很开心,最后我们回到了旅馆
我们还去了大连一些别的地方5
我们过了一个美好的假期习作•AnUnforgettableExperience•IwenttoDalianwithmyfamilythissummerholiday
Wegottherebyair
•Afterbreakfastinthemorning,webegantostartourtravel
FirstwetookthebustotheSeaPark
Therearemanydifferentkindsoffishes
Andtherewastheshowofdolphins
Thenwehadseafoodforlunchinarestaurant
•Afterlunchwewentswimming
Theseawasblueandbeachwasgolden
Weallenjoyedourselvesinthesea
Finallywewentbackthehotel,Wehadahappyday
•Inthistrip,wealsowenttosomeplacesinDalian•wehadagoodholiday
修改后作文Thissummerholiday,togetherwithmyfamily,IwentbyairtoDalian,whichisaverybeautifulandmoderncity
Inthemorning,havinghadthe