专题十一夹叙夹议作文话题类书面表达中夹叙夹议类作文应该注意以下几点：第一，根据话题内容叙事，向读者描绘某事物的样子、声音、味道等等。作者可以通过外表、行动或变化用语言描绘一个人，一个物体，一个地方或一个场面。第二，发表议论，不同人对事件的不同看法，或正反观点的对比。发表议论的过程要紧扣材料中心确立论点，论据要真实可信，论证过程要有说服力和感染力。第三，发表自己的观点，同时对文章作出总结。（2010·浙江）最近，李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”。请你根据她的事迹(在上周六下午，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装)，用英语为班级板报写一篇l00—120词的短文。你的文章应包括下列要点：1.李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；2.你的评论。注意：1.文章的标题和开头已给出(不计词数)。2.参考词汇：singingcontest歌咏比赛costume服装StarStudentoftheWeekLiYuehasbeenawardedthetitleof“StarStudentoftheWeek”forwhatshedidforourclass.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.文体信息：①文体：夹叙夹议文；②语体：正式语体；③人称：第三人称和第一人称；④中心大意：介绍李越的事迹及其对同学的影响，给出自己的观点。2.主导时态：一般过去时。3.内容要点：①李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”；②李越的事迹；③对同学的影响；④发表自己的看法。4.温馨提示：语言要正式，在有限的空间内传达丰富的内容。LiYuehasbeenawardedthetitleof“StarStudentoftheWeek”forwhatshedidforourclass.OnlastSaturday’safternoon,LiYuewenttobuytheclasscostumesforthesingingcontestdespitethefactthatitissohot.Besides,itwasadaywheneveryonehadagoodtimebutshewaswillingtoseektherightcostumefromoneshoptoanother.It’sherbehaviourthatmovedusdeeply.Encouragedbyherspirit,thewholeclassmadeeffortstotrain.Atlastoureffortpaidoffandwewonthefirstprize.LiYueiswarm-heartedandhaschangedourclasswithherbehaviour.Sincetheneachofusvoluntarilydoessomethingforothers.Thereisnodoubtthatsheisworththetitle.这是一篇夹叙夹议类，文章中心突出，层次清楚，记叙事件简明扼要，作者对所有的要点都进行了恰当的扩展，语句简洁表达丰富。句式多变，如：强调句，倒装句和非谓语动词结构。高级词汇也用的恰如其分，如：bewillingto,makeefforts,payoff等。是一篇不错的文章。如能把下列句子加以优化则文章能更上一个档次：1.OnlastSaturday’safternoon,LiYuewenttobuytheclasscostumesforthesingingcontest→改为Saturdayisadayforustorelaxandenjoyourselves,butjustOnlastSaturday’safternoon,LiYuevoluntarilywenttoselecttherightcostumesforthesingingcontest2.LiYueiswarm-heartedandhaschangedourclasswithherbehaviour.→改为LiYueisalwayswarm-heartedandcaresalotabouttheclass.Besides,sheoftendevoteshersparetimetohelpingothers.Shehassetagoodexampleforus.常用句式：1.Sohotthoughitwasthatday,shehadnocomplaintatall.天气是那么的热，她却一点也不抱怨。2.It’swhatshehasdonethatnotonlymovesusbutsetagoodexampleforus.就是她做的事不仅感动了我们而且还为我们树立了好榜样。3.Therefore,shedeservesthehonorandweshouldlearnfromher.因此，她值得尊重，我们应该向她学习。StarStudentoftheWeekLiYuehasbeenawardedthetitleof“StarStudentoftheWeek”forwhatshedidforourclass.OnthehotafternoonoflastSaturday,LiYuewentdowntownandwalkedfromonestoretoanother,lookingforthecostumeswewouldwearinthesingingcontest.Whiletherestofuswereenjoyingourleisuretimeincoolandcomfortablerooms,shespentthewholeafternoonsearchingandselecting.Finally,shefoundtherightclothes.Deeplymovedbyherefforts,wetriedourbestandwonthefirstprizeinthecontest.LiYueisalwayswarm-heartedandca...
