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2015年南宁市二模写作各档次例文2015/3/29第一档：3分DearSir/Madam,I’mLiHua,oneofthestudentswhoattendedthecourseEnglishFilmAppreciationlastterm.Englishinthelifeveryhelp.Itcanhelpgotoword,IlikeEnglish,studyEnglishFilmAppreciationbeinteresting,IthinkspeakEnglishisgreatthing,soIlikeEnglishFilm,hopewelcomejoininterm,Thankyou.SincerelyyoursLiHua给分理由：1）未完成试题规定的任务。2）明显遗漏主要内容。3）词汇项目有限。4）信息未能传达给读者。第二档次：8分DearSir/Madam,I’mLiHua,oneofthestudentswhoattendedthecourseEnglishFilmAppreciationlastterm.Asweknow,Englishismoreimportantdaybyday,butitalsoisverydifferent.NowthereareacoursewhichnotonlycanlearnEnglishbutalsowatchfilm,andifyouattendthecourseEnglishFilmAppreciation,itwillbeimportantyourEnglish.Ilikethecourseverymuch.SincerelyyoursLiHua给分理由：1）未恰当完成试题规定任务，遗漏或未描述清楚一些主要内容。2）语法项目有限，表达内容有限。第三档：13分DearSir/Madam,I’mLiHua,oneofthestudentswhoattendedthecourseEnglishFilmAppreciationlastterm.Iverylikethisclass.IlikeseetheEnglishfilms,Iattendthecoursefeelveryhappy.First,theEnglishFilmAppreciationclasscanhelpmelearnaboutmany1EnglishwordsandletmeinterestinginEnglishmore.Second，ItcanapprovemeEnglishspeakingskillsandapprovemeEnglishwritingskills.Third,ItcanhelpmerelexstudyYaLi.Ihavesomeadvisetotheclass.Firstly,Ihopeitcanholdmoretimesatoneweek.Secondly,Ihopeitcanplaymoredifferentkindsfilmstoourstudtents.SincerelyyoursLiHua给分理由：1）基本完成了试题规定任务。2）漏掉一些内容，但三大要点都有提到，分段明显。3）有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。4）虽然卷面不够工整，但不影响正常交际。5）能运用衔接句和过渡词。第四档：18分DearSir/Madam,I’mLiHua,oneofthestudentswhoattendedthecourseEnglishFilmAppreciationlastterm.MyfavoureclassesisEnglishFilmAppreciation.Iloveitbecauseitisveryinterestingandcolorful.Ifyouchoosethisclass,Ontheonehand,wewillfinditisfunofus;ontheotherhand,wecanimproveourspokenEnglishinthesametime.AndItcanmakeusEnglishmarksgetbetter.Ihavesomeadvice,first,wecanwatchdifferentfilmintheclass.Thefilmcouldfromeveryone.Besides,weshouldsayourthinkafterthelostflim.ItisimportantthatcanmakemorefriendsLetourclassgetmorefriendly.IhopetheEnglishteacherscanacceptmyadvice.LetourEnglishmarksgetbetter!Letourfriendsgetbetterandbetter.SincerelyyoursLiHua给分理由：1）内容要点齐全，补充得当。运用了适当的过渡词，达到了预期的写作目的。2）语法结构和词汇方面有些许错误。3）作文书写不太规范。第五档：23分DearSir/Madam,I’mLiHua,oneofthestudentswhoattendedthecourseEnglishFilmAppreciationlastterm.Ican’thelpsharingmydeeploveforit.Andifyouaskmewhat’smyfavouritecourse,myanswerswillalwaysbeit.2Intheclass,wewatchwonderfulmoviesonceaweek.Wecanshareourfeelingstoothersandwritethemdownlater.Sometimeswemaydiscussfavouritedirectorsandfilmstars,whichbroadenourhorizons.Tomakethecoursebetter,Iwillsharetwosuggestions.First,therecouldbemoreChinesemovies.Wecanlearnmorebycomparingfilmsofdifferentcultures.Second,wecandiscussthemusicinfilms,whichalsohelpsusunderstandthethemebetter.Iwouldappreciateitifyoucouldtakemyadviceintoconsideration.Pleasewritemesoon.SincerelyyoursLiHua给分理由：1）完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有的内容要点，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，卷面好。2）语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。满分作文：（一）DearSir/Madam,I’mLiHua,oneofthestudentswhoatten...