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Topicwriting话题作文的写作fog+smoke=smog灰霾：haze雾霾雾霾Whatcauseshaze?Whateffectsdoeshazehaveonus?(health,life)Effectsonpeople’shealth:coughsneezesorethroatlungcancer…respiratorydiseases(呼吸道疾病)Effectsonpeople’slife:1.Trafficisaffected.(Moretrafficcontrol./Highwaysareclosed.)2.Flightsareputoff/cancelled.3.Schoolssuspendclasses.…Howtoprotectourselvesinhazeweather?wearmasks.reduce/stopoutdooractivities.stayindoors.donotopenthewindows.buyairpurifiers.Keepmoregreenplantsinthehouse.…We’dbetter…Wecan…We’readvised…Acityinhazeisneitherbeautifulnorsuitableforliving.In1952,aseverehazeinLondonledtothedeathof12,000people,themajorityofwhomarechildrenandpeoplewithrespiratorydiseases.Ittook20yearstosolvethehazeinLondon.Measures:Plantmoretrees./Increasethegreenarea.shutdownsomefactories.developcleanenergy.takegreentransportation.establishlawandregulationtopunishandfine…Whatcanwedotofightagainsthaze?Expressions:1.To…,weshould/must…2.Inmyopinion,it’sourdutyto…3.It’simportant/necessaryforusto…4.Itwouldbebetterifwe…5.Usepassivevoice.(被动语态)假设你是李华，David是你的美国网友。他对目前中国出现的雾霾天气很关注，来信向你询问此事。请你给他写封回信。主要内容如下：1.感谢他的关注。2.简介雾霾对人们的影响。3.谈谈你的建议。注意：可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯流畅;开头与结尾已写好，不计入总词数;词数：120左右DearDavid，I’mgladtoreceiveyourletter.______________________________________Yours，LiHua1.Yourcompositionshouldbedividedintoparagraphs.2.Agoodparagraphisonethatconsistsofatopicsentenceandsupportingsentences.3.You’dbetterusesomelinkingwords.4.Handwritingisofgreatimportance.Requirements:Theoutlineofthewriting:Ending…beginning…Point2…BodyPoint1…supportingidea1supportingidea2supportingidea1/2/3…感谢他的关注雾霾的影响effectsonhealtheffectsonlife你的建议Howtoprotectyourself/theenvironment…ASSESSMENTstructureIstheessaydividedintoparts?Doeseachparthaveatopicsentence?contentAreallthedetailsincluded?Iseverythingtothepoint(切题)?LanguageDoesthewriteruseanylinkingwords?Arethereanyspellingmistakes?Isthereanyadvancedvocabulary（高级词汇）?Arethereanygoodsentencepatterns（句式）?Let’simproveit:DearDavid，I’mgladtoreceiveyourletter.Thankyouforyourconcerningabouttheweather.NowI’dliketotellyousomethingaboutthesmog.Smoghascausegreattroubletous.First,moreandmorepeoplearesufferingfromrespiratorydiseases,suchasbadcoughs,sorethroatorevenlungcancers.Asaresult,hospitalsarecrowdedwithpeople.Second,ithasbroughtmuchinconveniencetoourdailylifeliketrafficjam,roadaccidents.Meanwhile,flightsandshipshavetobecancelledorputoff.What’sworse,studentshavetostayathomebecauseschoolssuspendclasses.Inmyopinion,duringthehazeweather,we’dbetterwearmasksandreduceoutdooractivities.Inthemeantime,measuresshouldbetakentoprotecttheenvironment.Weshouldtakegreentransportation,developgreenenergyaswellasplantmoretrees.Hopingtohearfromyousoonandshareyourgoodideas.YoursLiHuaImproveyourletterafterclassandwriteitagainasyourhomework.