高考复习---书面表达评析及指导Ifyouaretheteacher假定你是李华,你的英国朋友Peter来信询问你的英语学习情况并希望你简单介绍自己家乡，请你根据下列要点写回信。要点:1.我学英语已经六年了，在老师和同学们的帮助下取得了一些进步；2.但是总觉得英语难学，尤其是英语中的一些习惯用法；3.今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语，争取能用流利的英语和你写信；4.我的家乡发生很大的变化，盖起了许多高楼，拓宽了道路，变得越来越漂亮和现代化；5.如果有时间可以到中国来，我会带领你参观我的家乡。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头语已为你写好。June8,2008DearPeter,I'mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.………….字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息，不得分。samplesofstudentworkBadsample卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得10分samplesofstudentworkreadandwritefindithardfluentEnglishtowriteGreatchangesroadshadtakenplaceinmyhometownbuildingswidenedItwillbewonderfulwhenyoucometoChinaifyouarefreeshowyouaroundIwillbegladto未用黑色水笔；语言不地道;中文式思维;语言错误较多，得分11分samplesofstudentworklearnoftheteachersandmyprogressreadandwriteithardtolearnhardwork.writelettersinfluentEnglishfoundhadbecomeWelcometoChinaifyouhavetimeshowyouaround语言素质较好;基本功不差;语句仍有毛病；得15分.samplesofstudentworkprogresswell∧widenedare词汇有错误;卷面有涂改;得17分.samplesofstudentworkroadsMyhometownisbecomingmoreandmore影响书面表达得分的因素：“大错误”包括时态错误、句子结构错误、中式英语等，如：1.Myhometownhadbigchange,buildmanyhouses,……2.Myhometownhasgreatchanges.◆语言表达出现“大错误”及“小错误”→Greatchangeshadtakenplaceinmyhometownthere.Forexample,manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.3.IfyougettoChinathathavetime,mewithyoulookmyhometown.4.Iwillwelcometoyou.◆“小错误”主要是反应在个别单词拼写错误、冠词介词使用不准确等方面,如：Undermyteacherandclassmatesallhelptome,…….→Ihopeyou’llgetachancetocometoChinaandI’llshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.→WelcometoChina.→Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,……◆没有使用高级词汇和复杂句1.Iwillvisitmyhometownwithyou.2.Ifyouhavetime,Iwilltakeyoutotravelaroundmyhometown.→Iwillshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.◆书写是否工整清晰也会影响答卷得分。卷面不整洁，涂改多；大小写;标点符号;书写不清，得分会很低！◆审题不认真，要点有所遗漏1.彻底理解题意，看准答题要求（包括字数要求）。2.把内容要点在稿纸上列成提纲。3.连词成句，连句成文。4.成文后认真检查，确信无一遗漏。注意：★完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容要点。★应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。★语法结构和词汇方面有些错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。★有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。书面表达评分最高标准（第五档21---25分）Onepossibleversion:June8,2008DearPeter,I'mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadesomeprogressinEnglish.HoweverIstillfindEnglishhardtolearn,suchassomedifficultidiomswhichmademeconfused.Nomatterhowharditis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.NotlongagoIreturnedtomyhometownandfoundgreatchangeshadtakenplacethere.Manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.Myhometownisgettingmodernandmoreandmorebeautiful.IhopeifyouhaveachancetocometoChinaandI’llshowyouaroundmyhometownwhenyouareonleave.Bestwishes,LiHuaMySuggestions:•1.beautifulwordsandexpressio...
