TeachingDesign白银市平川中学周有勤Teachingcontent:HowtoimproveourwritinglanguageTeachingaims:ThisclassisdesignedtodiscussEnglishwriting,aimedtoimprovetheseniorstudents’writinglanguage.Thevalueofitliesinthefactthatmostupperorinter-mediatestudentscomplainwhytheycan’tgethighmarksthougheverythingiscoveredintheirwritingwithnoerrorsormistakesmade.Actually,theydon’trealizethatinspiteofthecompleteness,correctnessandnicehandwritingoftheirEnglishwriting,simplewords,phasesandsentencepatternsareusedrepeatedlyintheirwritingfromthebeginningtotheend,showingverylowlanguagestandard,whichaccountsfortheirunsatisfiedwritingmarks.However,byarousingthestudents’awarenessanddoingsomepractice,thestudents’writinglanguagecanbeimprovedandthisisthegoalofthisclass.TeachingSteps:.Leading-inⅠ.ExaminingⅡawritingpassagebyreferringtothestandardsforafull-markcomposition1.Characteristicsofafull-markcompositionClear&Clean:handwritingisclearandclean.书写整洁Complete:coveralltheinformationwithnothinglost.信息完整Correct:usecorrectwords,sentencesandpunctuationmarksinexpression.表达正确Various:usevarietiesofwordsandsentencepatternstoexpresstheideasfreely.语言丰富Cohesive:useproperconnectingwords,phrasesandevensentencestoconnectthecontext,makingthewritingcohesiveinmeaning.语意连贯12.Examiningthewritingpassage:DearSirorMadam,MynameisLiHua.Iwouldliketoworkasavolunteerforthe2008Olympics.I’maboyandI’m18.IwasborninBeijing.I’mamiddleschoolstudent.Iwanttodosomethingforthe2008Olympics.I’mgoodatEnglish.Ilikesports.I’mgoodatcommunicatingwithothers.Ilikehelpingothers.I’mfamiliarwithBeijing.Itisimportantforthework.Ifyougivemethechance,I’lltrymybesttoofferthebestservicetoothers.Pleaseacceptmyapplication.Iwon’tdisappointyou!Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yoursfaithfully,LiHua.FindingouttheproblemsinthepassageⅢ1.Thesamesubject“I”2.Simple&repeatedwords“begoodat”&“like”3.Simple&repeatedsentencepatterns“I’m…”4.Nonecessarytransitionsexcept“and”.PuttingforwardthepossiblewaystoimproveⅣ1.Changethesubjects2.Usetheadvancedwordsandphrases3.Usevarietiesofsentencepatterns4.UsepropertransitionsⅤ.Practisingthewaysbyusingdetailedexamples1.Changethesubject改变主语：I’llofferthebestservicetoothers.→Offeringthebestservicetoothersismygoal.(用-ing形式做主语)→Itismygoaltoofferthebestservicetoothers..(用It做主语)2.Chooseadvancedphrases选取高级词汇:Ilikesports.→befondof/beinterestedin/becrazyabout2Thisisimportantforthework.→beofgreatimportanceI’lltrymybesttoofferthebestservice.→makeeveryeffort3.Usedifferentsentences使用多样句型:IamfamiliarwithBeijing.Itisimportantforthework.→IamfamiliarwithBeijing,whichisimportantforthework.(用定语从句)I’maboyandI’m18.IwasborninBeijing.I’mamiddleschoolstudent→BorninBeijing,I’man18-year-oldboystudyinginamiddleschool.(用分词做状语或定语)I’mfamiliarwithBeijing.（套用经典句型）→AnotherreasonliesinthefactthatI’mfamiliarwithBeijing.→ThemostimportantthingisthatI’mfamiliarwithBeijing.→ThereisnodoubtthatI’mfamiliarwithBeijing.4.Usetransitions使用过渡连接成份：表层次顺序、罗列增加常用：First,…Second,…Third,…Fourth,…Last…→Tobeginwith,Besides,What’smore,Inaddition,Finally,etc.→Firstandforemost,Also,Furthermore,Lastbutnotleast,etc.Ⅵ.RefiningtheoriginalwritingpassagebyusingthewayslearnedaboveDearSirandMadam,MynameisLiHua.Iamwritingtoapplyforajobtoworkasavolunteerforthe2008Olympics.BorninBeijing,Iaman18-year-oldboystudyinginamiddleschool.IampreparedtomakeagreatcontributiontotheOlympics.First,IamfluentinEnglish,whichisofgreatimportance.Besides,Iamfondofsports.Whatismore,communicatingwithotheriswhatIlikemost.Inaddition,Iamalwaysreadytohelpothers.Last,thereisnodoubtthatIamfamiliarwithBeijingbecauseIliveinBeijing.Givenmethischance,Iwillsparenoefforttoofferthebestservicetoothers.Lookingforwardtoyourreply!Yoursfaithfully,LiHua3Ⅵ.Summingupandreviewingthekeyslearnedinthisclass4
